do you think i'm stupid?

violet ray · August 2004

~*~

suede · August 2004

another good one. there are other world's to be rocked. if this person doesn't give you their time...then they are not worth your time. i learned that not too long ago.

Amaterasu · August 2004

people!! A person whoever she is has feelings too
but you shred it as if its second nature...
Maybe if you learn a thing or two about yourself
you would think twice about how you effect the
one you supposedly "love" then you wouldn't have
to question your STUPIDITY.

violet ray · August 2004

Originally posted by Amaterasu
people!! A person whoever she is has feelings too
but you shred it as if its second nature...
Maybe if you learn a thing or two about yourself
you would think twice about how you effect the
one you supposedly "love" then you wouldn't have
to question your STUPIDITY.

can you explain that please?

DopeBeastie · August 2004

this poem questions one man's duplicity
the author is by no means responsible for the emotions of the subject's other interests, only her own. she, like most amatuer poets, catharts a p.o.v., and it is necessary to do should she wish to transcend the experience ~ a rather intelligent move, imo

to highlight and bold "stupidity" is low down, mean, hateful and selfish

fire fodder

as it were

rot, even

FinsburyParkCarrots · August 2004

I side wholeheartedly with Pasta on this one.

Thank you for your poem, violet ray.

violet ray · August 2004

and thank you both.

i can't help but wonder why *my* shredded feelings aren't supposed to matter, amaterasu?

violet ray · August 2004

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nailz100 · August 2004

I think she's talking about the feelings of this other girl....and maybe that you should warn her about this guy instead of leaving her to fend for herself against this wolf....who knows.
Of course your feelings matter....I'm with you...my guess is one day this wolf will be come the sheep and be devoured.

Amaterasu · August 2004

Referring to your first post then the self posed
question of stupidity only exemplifys your own
victimization..
I don't have time for this.

nailz100 · August 2004

What??....who's victimization is she supposed to write about if not her own?

FinsburyParkCarrots · August 2004

If there is any rule in reading literature at all - and I'm a training literary critic and I can posit this with some qualification - then it's that you can never presume that the first person, self referential narrator of any piece of poetry or prose, though perhaps unnamed, is the actual poet or author. Rabindranath Tagore often wrote poems from a variety of vocal and focal perspectives, and it didn't make his work any the less 'true' for that. The above argument against the work doesn't reasonably respect the strength of the poem itself but presumes an authorial intention you can never know just by reading.

"Criticism" in my book means an informed analytical reading of a text which is judicious to the work.

nailz100 · August 2004

I hear that fins....that could definately be true
My point is (if it is indeed her own work)...then it is completely just, for her to write about how she feels and not have to worry about what other people think she should do. I'd be damned to let someone tell me how to write when I am spewing venom in every direction...my advice would be to cover your eyes. Kudos to you VR for writing whats on your mind, if indeed it is your mind that it is on...

FinsburyParkCarrots · August 2004

Originally posted by nailz100
I hear that fins....that could definately be true
My point is (if it is indeed her own work)...then it is completely just, for her to write about how she feels and not have to worry about what other people think she should do. I'd be damned to let someone tell me how to write when I am spewing venom in every direction...my advice would be to cover your eyes. Kudos to you VR for writing whats on your mind, if indeed it is your mind that it is on...

Oh sure, we agree. If our works require feedback it should be constructive and never personal.

DopeBeastie · August 2004

Originally posted by Amaterasu
Referring to your first post then the self posed
question of stupidity only exemplifys your own
victimization..
I don't have time for this.

as does the actual use of the word "victim"

however...

it's just a poem, right? lol....

goofs :P

suede · August 2004

fuckin' a

violet ray · August 2004

this crappy bunch of words and you people are wondering if i "really" wrote it?

i was trying to let my feelings out instead of holding them in for a change...
gotta remember not to do that, it doesn't work.

JDE-PJ · August 2004

Originally posted by violet ray
this crappy bunch of words and you people are wondering if i "really" wrote it?

i was trying to let my feelings out instead of holding them in for a change...
gotta remember not to do that, it doesn't work.

nope you're wrong, letting them out is always the right thing, no matter what happens, if the people who read them don't get them, maybe the wrong people are in your life!

oh and your words are not crappy.

suede · August 2004

i'm soooo right

violet ray · August 2004

Originally posted by JDE-PJ
nope you're wrong, letting them out is always the right thing, no matter what happens, if the people who read them don't get them, maybe the wrong people are in your life!

oh and your words are not crappy.

its not the right thing to do
it doesn't work
it doesn't feel good
and you end up being a total fucking asshole idiot

JDE-PJ · August 2004

Originally posted by violet ray
its not the right thing to do
it doesn't work
it doesn't feel good
and you end up being a total fucking asshole idiot

nope, nope, nope.

you're none of those things, and I am sorry you don't feel well, but again maybe you're writing your feelings out to the wrong people violet ray.

do you think i'm stupid?

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