la mort de la pluie

trappedinmyradio
trappedinmyradio Posts: 1,189
edited May 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Do you remember that time in Pittsburgh…
...No
That time at Yama when I spilled my water glass
You laughed, and covered your cute nose and mouth with your hand
…that never happened
The moment when we heard the new record together
Did you put your hand on my hand on my leg and squeeze
because the excitement was wrenching?
...No,that didn’t happen either…
Do you remember the concert back in June when you smiled
and said you would never leave because leaving would mean losing?
…you left.
The time I called and you called back because my message was sweet…
…I’m confused again…
...creating snapshot images…
moving together - fast - forming a movie.

I gave you the Admit One
You smiled sideways…the way you do with your upper lip
looked at the car passing behind you - a four-door…something red -
slowly moved those hazel eyes to the concrete at your feet…my feet.
opened the purse you said you’d never carry
stuffed another one inside…wrinkling.
I said, “you’re beautiful from above”
You had a thought…he loves me
My eyes were warm, that night, with the purple-haze sunset inside
You brushed the back of your index finger down my cheek
and then put the palm of your hand on my face, smiled and said,
“I’ll talk to you soon,” to which I replied,
“I’m going to miss you…”
and I do.
I'll dig a tunnel
from my window to yours
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  • jamjam
    jamjam Posts: 491
    This one is cool and funny too. I like it a lot. Somehow I can relate to this....
  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    I think relationships should come equipped with 45magnums.

    ali
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

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  • jamjam
    jamjam Posts: 491
    That's horrible, why would you say something like this?
  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    Because I feel as though as soon as men piss you off in a relationship by say,
    having intercourse too soon or the latter,they should be executed immediatly following so that no gossip ensues around the neighborhood.:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    . ......... ;)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • jamjam
    jamjam Posts: 491
    I see........interesting, can't say I can relate.....that is funny though.
  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    Thank you...it was suppossed to be funny....I'm an entertainer....
    entertaining myself most of the time...but I'm funny like that.:):):):):):):):)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • jamjam
    jamjam Posts: 491
    I know what you mean.....I entertain myself a lot. Private moments is what somebody I know calls it, when you're laughing to yourself and nobody is sure why.:):)
  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    Well...you Have To....its The Only Way To Stay Sane.i Could See Calling It A Private Moment...you Have To Stay In Touch With Yourself...your Soul And Higher Connection And To Those You Love.
    Plus....someone Has To Laugh At Your Jokes:);)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • trappedinmyradio
    trappedinmyradio Posts: 1,189
    jamjam wrote:
    This one is cool and funny too. I like it a lot. Somehow I can relate to this....

    could you tell me what you think is funny about it?
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    Words like these just highlight for me how every person feels that the little incidents and memories associated with an authentic love are important.

    These little things mean nothing to other people but they seem SO IMPORTANT to the people involved. Memories, happy and sad, can bring you to tears.

    I guess it universal.
    &&&&&&&&&&&&&&
  • jamjam
    jamjam Posts: 491
    trappedinmyradio wrote:
    could you tell me what you think is funny about it?
    I'm sorry, it is beautifully written. But the first part of it is kind of funny, because you're so direct with it and you're remembering times that didn't happen. I can relate to this and I could cry but I chose to smile instead. The second part is just sweet...so I guess it's kind of funny in an ironic way.
  • trappedinmyradio
    trappedinmyradio Posts: 1,189
    jamjam wrote:
    I'm sorry, it is beautifully written. But the first part of it is kind of funny, because you're so direct with it and you're remembering times that didn't happen. I can relate to this and I could cry but I chose to smile instead. The second part is just sweet...so I guess it's kind of funny in an ironic way.

    fair enough - just wondered - it makes me cry - maybe that's why i put it into words. just snapshots of things that were supposed to happen - and then of one thing that did happen -
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours

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