Naked in the Room

grooveamatic
grooveamatic Posts: 1,374
edited May 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Naked in the room
I stand,
Inspecting my thighs,
Heaving stomach,
My hair-topped feet.
Everything I need moves with me.
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  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    I picture some nude guy standing looking down past the folds (thanks B) of his belly to his hair-topped feet.....it might not be you Groovy, but I love it when poems or books take me somewhere else, in this case to a kind of nondescript room with some nude guy in it.....hehehehehehe
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    grooveamatic wrote:
    Naked in the room
    I stand,
    Inspecting my thighs,
    Heaving stomach,
    My hair-topped feet.
    Everything I need moves with me.
    Yea groove...evrything you need moves with you.
    I DARE you to walk out of that house naked for a year.

    (Call me.):)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamatic
    grooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    Yea groove...evrything you need moves with you.
    I DARE you to walk out of that house naked for a year.

    (Call me.):)

    Stop being so literal.

    (I did call you. Some dude answered the phone.) :)
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  • CoffeeHound
    CoffeeHound Posts: 12
    "My hair-topped feet"


    very nice :)
    the Hound
  • pearlmutt
    pearlmutt Posts: 392
    "My hair-topped feet"

    !

    I've read this poem every day since it was posted and never noticed that, really -- that's awesome, groove's narrator could be a hobbit.
  • grooveamatic
    grooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    pearlmutt wrote:
    "My hair-topped feet"

    !

    I've read this poem every day since it was posted and never noticed that, really -- that's awesome, groove's narrator could be a hobbit.

    Perhaps I am the next Tolkein? (sp?) :)
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  • pearlmutt
    pearlmutt Posts: 392
    ?

    let's hope.

    then i'll get to say something like, well i sort of kind of knew in that weird new wave technological kind of way, a creator of hobbits!
  • grooveamatic
    grooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    pearlmutt wrote:
    ?

    let's hope.

    then i'll get to say something like, well i sort of kind of knew in that weird new wave technological kind of way, a creator of hobbits!

    And what a thing to say!
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  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    grooveamatic wrote:
    Stop being so literal.

    (I did call you. Some dude answered the phone.) :)


    Some dude answered the phone?It mustve been my lover.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamatic
    grooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    Some dude answered the phone?It mustve been my lover.

    I figured. I was pissed.
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  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    But we agreed I could f*ck other people.
    Plus,I didn't know you were the jealous type.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamatic
    grooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    But we agreed I could f*ck other people.
    Plus,I didn't know you were the jealous type.

    I'm only the jealous type when other men are involved. :)

    Been awhile since I saw you here this late....
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  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    Yea...I decided to actually cope with my deepest fears and stay awake and
    work....write a little.I cant wait to see PJ play when they come to NJ or Philly.How about you?
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamatic
    grooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Oh man. I am dying to see a show. Was lucky enough to make 2 shows on the VFC but only wetted my whistle....I'm shooting for 3 when they do America next....maybe I'll see you out on the trail!
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  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    Yea...I hope to meet you...I wannna catch them at the spectrum if they play there or one of those venues....It would be cool if they played Trentonor camden....Sorry it took me so long to resond....i was Im'ed.
    Going to read your pM now!!!!!!!


    ROSES ARE RED
    VIOLETS ARE BLUE
    I'M HORNY
    IS YOUR MOM?
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamatic
    grooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    Yea...I hope to meet you...I wannna catch them at the spectrum if they play there or one of those venues....It would be cool if they played Trentonor camden....Sorry it took me so long to resond....i was Im'ed.
    Going to read your pM now!!!!!!!


    ROSES ARE RED
    VIOLETS ARE BLUE
    I'M HORNY
    IS YOUR MOM?


    Camden would be awesome....so would Spectrum....doesn't matter to me though....as long as there's at least 2 shows in the vicinity here....it would be super-cool to finally meet you.

    that poem is awesome. I'll PM you my mom's #.
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  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    grooveamatic wrote:
    Camden would be awesome....so would Spectrum....doesn't matter to me though....as long as there's at least 2 shows in the vicinity here....it would be super-cool to finally meet you.

    that poem is awesome. I'll PM you my mom's #.
    yEA...iT WOULD BE COOL TO MEET YOU 2.

    YOU LIKE MY POEM?iS YOUR MOM'S # 1-800-GET-LAID?
    i ALREADY KNOW IT.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamatic
    grooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    yEA...iT WOULD BE COOL TO MEET YOU 2.

    YOU LIKE MY POEM?iS YOUR MOM'S # 1-800-GET-LAID?
    i ALREADY KNOW IT.

    You are in rare form tonight, A.
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  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    grooveamatic wrote:
    You are in rare form tonight, A.
    i'M ONLY KIDDING.:) i LOVE YOU TO DEATH! i WOULD NEVER SAY ANYTHING SERIUOSLY TO SUCH A NICE,FUNNY GUY,HIMSELF!pLEASE FORGIVE ME AND MY SENSE OF HUMOR......;)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamatic
    grooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    i'M ONLY KIDDING.:) i LOVE YOU TO DEATH! i WOULD NEVER SAY ANYTHING SERIUOSLY TO SUCH A NICE,FUNNY GUY,HIMSELF!pLEASE FORGIVE ME AND MY SENSE OF HUMOR......;)

    excellent...just thought I detected some actual anger in some of your posts and the PM...was just walking on eggshells until I could be sure....
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