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  • Yellow
    Yellow Posts: 699
    nice poem, savannah...
    It's all yellow.


  • yup
    "I cant hear you, but i feel the things you say"

  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    Things die that are best left unremembered. So walk away, forget, and this thread will be dead to thee...

    Savannah the poem was not just inspiring but jaw droppingly funny. Having shift managed a mcdonald's and having had many a conversation concerning the metaphysical consequences of working such a shift driven commune... the karma of fast food supposedly delivered fresh (it is really best that people don't know) and the ungodly amounts of profit that are made off the masses. That large coke you bought for 1.89 costs approx 2.5 cents or so, including cup, lid and straw...

    That's a lot of money folks.

    and since the lovely and graceful savannah has blessed us we shall honor her in return. I believe the top hat, cane, and bow may look familiar to you madam. So. A new piece. I hope it turns out for the best.





    Cheeks of High Color

    The high city plains no longer swept with wheat
    They weep

    Buildings do not sway with the lost tempo of a colored age
    That dance perchance lost to a storm chaser's will
    Never was such violent fury in nature's temper tantrum
    Her skinned knee a-bleeding in the dirt and the dust bowl of temporal gate

    She has no love given
    No gravelly hands with which to uplift her in the air and sky
    No kisses blown upon the tempest
    Forged alone: a weapon, a midwife, a thief, a medicinal witch

    The wheat, which bows rhythmically beneath its station, carries the ever shifting footsteps of a fractious child; such ribbons streaming behind in the carrying slipstream, our wendigo singing songs of ever gold and sunsets that fade slowly on the battered road to midnight, wearied and faded by crawling sands ever so curious and alive. The walking stick and the zen garden.

    It is rumored that the sun, before dawn, has found a way to dab its brow with morning dew. It is the steam that arises from this union that brings us our early mists that dim the rise and heighten the fantasy of the new cycle.

    Would that our lungs could drink and that our eyes may taste:
    Such photographic pulmonarial culinary joy...
    Breathe deep that which may make us whole, sending visions to those across the sea;

    dreams of hawk's doves and winged percussion.

    The wheat falls flat in abashed grace, submission,
    And our halos shall be hewn from the remaining tatters of both sunset and sash.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • our early mystical,
    fantastical
    evictional
    devotionals
    hail from downsideup sunshine
    smiling salt... ha ha ha... on my brow... ha ha...
    one one thousand mile an hour soul yo yo
    snaps and comes right back
    and the hydrogen laughs
    my god, how it laughs
    ~all is full of love~
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Originally posted by tenaciousA
    our early mystical,
    fantastical
    evictional
    devotionals
    hail from downsideup sunshine
    smiling salt... ha ha ha... on my brow... ha ha...
    one one thousand mile an hour soul yo yo
    snaps and comes right back
    and the hydrogen laughs
    my god, how it laughs

    Hey, Tenacious! Where've ya been???!!

    ;)
  • one thousand miles an hour is relatively slow in space...
    you know, considering the distances involved...




    ;)
    ~all is full of love~
  • Originally posted by setaside2
    The wheat, which bows rhythmically beneath its station, carries the ever shifting footsteps of a fractious child; such ribbons streaming behind in the carrying slipstream, our wendigo singing songs of ever gold and sunsets that fade slowly on the battered road to midnight, wearied and faded by crawling sands ever so curious and alive. The walking stick and the zen garden.

    It is rumored that the sun, before dawn, has found a way to dab its brow with morning dew. It is the steam that arises from this union that brings us our early mists that dim the rise and heighten the fantasy of the new cycle.


    sigh...

    "And our halos shall be hewn from the remaining tatters of both sunset and sash"

    seta, you have a magical gift for weaving musical words into the divine. The circle of life, the layers of myth and purpose, the stuttering finality of city life masking our longing for our true place: the earth and sky, sunshine and starlight, and joy in mysticism versus the cold realities of reason and knowledge.

    I loved the poem, seta. Thank you for sharing it.

    Elen sila lumenn omentielvo
  • Originally posted by setaside2





    Cheeks of High Color

    The high city plains no longer swept with wheat
    They weep

    Buildings do not sway with the lost tempo of a colored age
    That dance perchance lost to a storm chaser's will
    Never was such violent fury in nature's temper tantrum
    Her skinned knee a-bleeding in the dirt and the dust bowl of temporal gate

    She has no love given
    No gravelly hands with which to uplift her in the air and sky
    No kisses blown upon the tempest
    Forged alone: a weapon, a midwife, a thief, a medicinal witch

    this first part is rather elusive, no? perhaps some lost child with no one to raise her? or perhaps left to raise herself? and what of the wheat? the wheat that gives life and trade to the city, gone and they weep?...


    The wheat, which bows rhythmically beneath its station, carries the ever shifting footsteps of a fractious child; such ribbons streaming behind in the carrying slipstream, our wendigo singing songs of ever gold and sunsets that fade slowly on the battered road to midnight, wearied and faded by crawling sands ever so curious and alive. The walking stick and the zen garden.


    and this... this is why i like your writing so much... it just GOES everywhere... that which is gone guides the path of this unwatched child? windigo??? evil??? so... the evil songs fade as the unkept child moves toward the end... AND the path to the end is wearied by curious sands???

    It is rumored that the sun, before dawn, has found a way to dab its brow with morning dew. It is the steam that arises from this union that brings us our early mists that dim the rise and heighten the fantasy of the new cycle.

    delightful to think of the sun at the bathroom sink each morning... and this steam... and the early mists dimming the rise and heightening fantasy??? this, imo, is the most provoking part of the whole piece... the word "fantasy" cuts like an insult.... denies the reality in possibilities (jmo...)

    Would that our lungs could drink and that our eyes may taste:
    Such photographic pulmonarial culinary joy...
    Breathe deep that which may make us whole, sending visions to those across the sea;

    dreams of hawk's doves and winged percussion.

    The wheat falls flat in abashed grace, submission,
    And our halos shall be hewn from the remaining tatters of both sunset and sash.

    these are just like puzzles with no picture by which to put them together... and all the empy parts left to the imagination to fill and make sense of...

    well done, seta :)
    Nosotros nunca escuchamos la voz adentro
  • Sharon_Hearts_PJ
    Sharon_Hearts_PJ Bristol, PA Posts: 1,383
    Originally posted by Fortunate Sean
    yup

    hmph
    *Rock and/or Roll!*
  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    Strangely Silicon

    S trange how most nights are starry nights
    and how often they begin with a grain of sand
    that shark's tooth in your hand a cut till it bleeds reminder of whether or not one can

    it was a starry night and the earth and moon gazed upon one another in a questioning manner
    said silicon sliver slides and slips shimmering in the slight silvering luminescence
    shapeshifting as the waves from around the globe reach the reef in time to turn back again and again.
    a handful glistens and chunks, post mindless sifting, drifts in slow motion crumble to the tide;
    the forgetfulness of fascination, shark's teeth and shells and remanants pattering to the sand

    men were throwing themselves at the moon

    planets swung around watching enthralled,
    astounded.

    certainly an exit made to appear stellar and perhaps divine
    an explosion of fire and thrust and push and shout and jump and swim and pull and fight
    the invention of flame never truly theirs
    the struggle of self has finally carried beyond the terran rock and into the boundaries of god

    the moon sits silently. Man's feet tickle ever so and it is difficult to behave;
    she wonders at action and curiosity and celebrates quietly to herself; it is a rare joy.

    they have come for the sand in the hand that proves that man
    his dreams limited by sight and sight alone
    perhaps finally exists beyond the creation that bore him in all its infallible simplicity

    the moon and the beach, unblinking in the glow and reflection of one another, borrow time.
    moon grabs the tides as a comfort, a holding of earth's liquidity, a grasping of the hand.
    beach borrows the silver only moon can provide and threads her worldly weave as the rolling waves change the swatch of brush she applies.

    the men examine their handful of god, their fiery fancy of flight finally at an end; a watery downing, a wave and a cushioned floatation...
    their fingertips sift and sieve through a bucket of dream and they gape, incredulous, at one another for it has gone drab and grey in the medical glare of fluorescent lights.

    a quick step outside reveals the silver that remains hanging in the night sky:
    a dollar coin minted, a hematite mantra.
    The men smoke silently,
    beach secretly molding herself to feet and stealing a feel when she can,
    filling in as they leave.
    Shark's teeth, well polished by years of travel, a small comfort to those who have touched otherwhere
    Realizing at the they last: they were sent for... they had been called.

    The moon is a lonely girl wished upon, granting lovers and grace with ne'er a retainer for herself

    she, vying for the attentions of glitter beach so long,
    the waves her only sensuality...
    they looked upon one another, the original romance the worst sort of charade;
    kept apart by magnetism and gravity, a love no science could save
    and no spirit could connect

    how does one throw a kiss across the deepening room, the void spanning lifetimes..?
    send the men with their dreams and their star spanning machines and their footprints may sign a love letter long since written and left to drift the tide and on the tide alone

    there was once merely one ocean to span and it was of blue and amethyst and of blood red skies.
    it was a lonely journey for those who dared, the stars being perceived as cold company.
    sailors searched for better sand as a world reached out within itself to reconnect, the foreign land an imaginary charade as it was really all a part of one
    self knowledge the hardest and most picaresque of adventures

    and so man sets sail again with moon, sea and lover's beach smiling knowing smiles
    preparing for the union that only those they have created may bring.

    Shark's tooth and abalone shell
    iron, nickel, hematite...
    a traceless passage of footsteps and fire.
    as man reaches deeply without for the self within
    two worlds, days apart, unite
    and continue their dance-watch of love-oblivion.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • ...and she still gives her love, she just gives it away...

    Lovely, seta
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Yellow
    Yellow Posts: 699
    you are an excellent friend, seta :)
    thank you so much :)
    It's all yellow.


  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    Yeah, that one was definitely different for me. It seems I'm starting to tilt towards the narrative, the flow prose.... there is enough beat and rhythm in there to satisfy but I wonder....

    does it hold? what do you guys think?

    not to say I don't like it, I do.... it is a lovely child...
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • I don't know anything, remember? :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • "men were throwing themselves at the moon"

    nice imagery...

    I like the narrative tilt, Seta. Such a nice flow.
  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    we looked for it
    we examined it from a far
    we measured its existence by thumb and forefinger
    eyeing through an encircled hand
    we pondered its creation, its construction
    was it even cheese? we wondered

    we threw stones at its image, drew blood in its gaze
    heiroglyphics and archaic symmetry based upon its age
    arrows fletched and bows hewn
    wars, religions, massive south american constructs spawned
    all dedicated to the moon

    galileo wrapped some glass in some leather
    then brass and copper
    he was executed for his observations
    and then martyred centuries later

    we polished glass in larger and larger aspherical forms
    bringing us closer and closer
    yet still from a far
    the textures were maddening in their circumspect and
    inability to communicate the secrets so assuredly hidden there

    schmidt-newtonian
    schmidt-cassegrain
    diffraction
    refraction
    equatorial push

    we discovered the silent flight of hot air
    the rotary propeller and the flap
    the jet engine and the speed of sound
    the rocket engine and its ability to finally take us far enough

    yea we throw ourselves at the moon in hopes that angels will catch us
    in hopes that perhaps it really IS a god who eats the moon during an eclipse in an effort of metagastroentestinal cleansing
    in hopes that there is something out there that may show us... other

    the moon.


    that one isn't so much a poem as it just what was on my mind now... i haven't thought so much about the moon since i used to watch the shuttles launch at night from cape canaveral.... i remember watching the challenger explode and rain debris on my city for weeks and thinking my dreams had died.

    i remember watching images of another shuttle break apart on television and think to myself... the future of man is balked again. Two crews of seven dreamers now a part of that which they loved so much.

    The future to me is a mass of pathways. I am of the opinion that regardless the way we choose, the path is always linear, as if we truly had no choice at all really.

    I am thinking about this alot and wondering what I am to do. I look to the moon... and she is kind to me but she gives no answer. Not the slightest hint.
    I used to feel as though I had something in touch with the future, something beyond a vague hint of more... I don't know what happened to that feeling, perhaps it is given only to the children of any given age and, being careless enough to grow up, we lose it as we grow older.

    Deja vu... perhaps the remnants of the previous turn on this particular wheel.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • yeah, I saw the Challenger blow up on television, an image that still haunts me to this day....

    The moon, she does not give me purpose or answers, either....however, I still feel a sense of mystery and wonder when I look at the moon. The feeling is not nearly as strong as it was in childhood, but it is still there.... especially during the harvest moon, when it looms large on the horizon...
  • the moons image always seems haunting to me.....cold........chilling......dark.........but in a odd way comforting....like the basement in my house...........exept no spiders on the moon so thats a plus
  • spiders...most horrible and utterly parylizing fear...
    yeah, no spiders on the moon, thank goodness.