Bob Dylan challenge......

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  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    well, this is the piece de resistance in my thread, thanks Oldy, and I challenge anyone to surpass it.....(I might be getting ill......I'm a bit worried that I'm on teh road to psychosis.....forgive me, everything will go along as normal....but if I get ill....remember it's just part of me)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,390
    ISN wrote:
    well, this is the piece de resistance in my thread, thanks Oldy, and I challenge anyone to surpass it.....(I might be getting ill......I'm a bit worried that I'm on teh road to psychosis.....forgive me, everything will go along as normal....but if I get ill....remember it's just part of me)
    I hope you feel better or overcome what needs to be overcome.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    I'm trying sweets, but it's so insidious......it's really a weed.....in the real sense.....(like fast-growing ivy)......I'm really struggling - I hope it's a false alarm....but....I'm still out there living....with it all....and striving....and I'm so weak with this illness.....I really appreciate your kind words
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ISN wrote:
    I'm trying sweets, but it's so insidious......it's really a weed.....in the real sense.....(like fast-growing ivy)......I'm really struggling - I hope it's a false alarm....but....I'm still out there living....with it all....and striving....and I'm so weak with this illness.....I really appreciate your kind words

    There's this lady
    feelin' tight in her chest,
    world's pressin' in
    and she wears it like a vest,
    but it's more of a corset
    n' someone's pullin' the strings,
    just wish she could cast it off
    and spread her beautiful wings! :)

    {{{{ISN}}}} Keeping ya in my thoughts and hoping you feel better lickedy split, sweetheart! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • olderman
    olderman Posts: 1,765
    ISN wrote:
    well, this is the piece de resistance in my thread, thanks Oldy, and I challenge anyone to surpass it.....(I might be getting ill......I'm a bit worried that I'm on teh road to psychosis.....forgive me, everything will go along as normal....but if I get ill....remember it's just part of me)


    ISN ... it's OK. Please be OK. We love you. It's true.
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    thanks you lot......I feel a lot better today, I organised the cavalry....like a posse.....I whipped the psychologist into shape, and have an appointment with a brilliant psychiatrist on Tuesday afternoon.....my ex is being very nice to me, and Torin's nearly recovered.....I'm overstretched this month, and Torin's having an op on the 25th plus the saga with immigration continues - I have to have a chest x-ray Monday 8.30am......I'm so over-committed - I can't handle stress of any kind.....because I was emotionally abused when I was a nipper.....trauma....

    your kind wishes mean a lot to me......more than I can articulate, and I really appreciate the family-feel of this place and all the wonderful people on the board.....I hope I haven't said anything rash (eg. yesterday), and feel I must wade through the crap I wrote when I was out of it yesterday, in case I was overly insulting......hehehehehehe......one of the symptoms of my decline is a tendency to be garrullous - shut up ISN!!!!hehehehehehe


    please go back to whatever you were doing....heheheheh (I liked your peom Being)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • was definatly in a dylan mood when i wrote this....

    Im leaving the fridge door
    open
    to light me to your room,
    for its all that i can do,

    for it talks to me in tongues.
    says "young boy, to see me you must be free.
    Can you even find your elbow from your knees?"

    Miss Dutchess she warns
    me not to eat the food
    from your table

    but Ill sit down to feast
    and watch the jester
    perform soap operas starring
    Cain and Abel

    then the bouncers of truth
    said " Man, its time to leave.
    Your invitation is expired

    as my head hit the dirt
    how i wished for the sense to retire

    my beds like the ocean
    its got some rough seas ahead
    the pillows a ship
    and the crews been long dead

    with the captain that lost his compass
    he just searches his maps
    with a pencil he calls trust.

    and the fridge light burns on
    giding me to your oom
    and if that bulb goes out
    it ll always be too soon.
    Some people have to have the sultry evenings Cocktails in the blue, red and grey But I like every minute of the day.
    INTER-FUCKING-MISSION!!!
    Newcastle-Riverside 02/22/92!!!
    E.rutherford New Jersey 01/06/06
    Athens -Greece.survived !barely-
    Wembley 18/06/07- no words- just smiles!
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    to paraphrase another illustrious poet, it's a triumph!!!!!
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • and this one is so obvious is slaps you!

    im seeing Mr Dylan in concert again in Nov!

    Weekenders

    Bob played the blues
    and we sat and got wasted
    5ft away from Baby Blue
    2 hours later it was all over
    never thought the day would come

    " How does it feel" he sang
    like a parade from here

    So I sat and got wasted time and again

    so im driving
    and the skys as red as my face the day SHE told me "its over"
    but its good and the storm is attacking the car
    but im here and I'm warm and she's too.


    Ryan went crazy
    48 hours later
    blowin and puffin his harp

    On the plane far away
    the moon was so bright
    im sure he's trying to keep me awake

    rested head on the window
    but frost kept it cool
    no space for my ecomomy legs
    do 1st class grow limbs that are doubled in size?

    too much wine
    to allow me to drive
    so walked on the edge of the cliff

    she said I love you
    and I said I do too
    but did I mean it
    I really don't know

    After the party i fell down a hole
    same hole as I fell down before
    . they all fucking laughed
    and I howled too,
    as soon as I got off the floor.

    For a bottle of wine or three or four
    and a weekend I want to repeat
    I'd give it all up to do it all over and over again.
    Some people have to have the sultry evenings Cocktails in the blue, red and grey But I like every minute of the day.
    INTER-FUCKING-MISSION!!!
    Newcastle-Riverside 02/22/92!!!
    E.rutherford New Jersey 01/06/06
    Athens -Greece.survived !barely-
    Wembley 18/06/07- no words- just smiles!
  • was definatly in a dylan mood when i wrote this....

    Im leaving the fridge door
    open
    to light me to your room,
    for its all that i can do,

    for it talks to me in tongues.
    says "young boy, to see me you must be free.
    Can you even find your elbow from your knees?"

    Miss Dutchess she warns
    me not to eat the food
    from your table

    but Ill sit down to feast
    and watch the jester
    perform soap operas starring
    Cain and Abel

    then the bouncers of truth
    said " Man, its time to leave.
    Your invitation is expired

    as my head hit the dirt
    how i wished for the sense to retire

    my beds like the ocean
    its got some rough seas ahead
    the pillows a ship
    and the crews been long dead

    with the captain that lost his compass
    he just searches his maps
    with a pencil he calls trust.

    and the fridge light burns on
    giding me to your oom
    and if that bulb goes out
    it ll always be too soon.

    Ah, the sultry one! :) Very :cool: !
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • cheers sweets!
    just passed a scuba diving course!
    Some people have to have the sultry evenings Cocktails in the blue, red and grey But I like every minute of the day.
    INTER-FUCKING-MISSION!!!
    Newcastle-Riverside 02/22/92!!!
    E.rutherford New Jersey 01/06/06
    Athens -Greece.survived !barely-
    Wembley 18/06/07- no words- just smiles!
  • cheers sweets!
    just passed a scuba diving course!

    That's awesome! Wow! Man, your gonna have some deep sea diving fun, I suppose. You taking a vacation anywhere that you can use your new found skills? :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Goulet
    Goulet Posts: 918
    Bob Dylan is a poor man's Ramblin' Jack Elliot, who, in turn, is a poor man's Woody Guthrie, who, in turn, is a poor man's Leadbelly, who, in turn, stole songs from those before the age of recorded sound.
  • man, i love leadbelly.

    he did some great songs

    "you must have that pure religion , Halleloo,

    "green corn"
    think my favourite is "green goose"

    i heard Rock Island Line by him years before I heard Johnny Cash do it, and I still think Ledbelly rules it!!!!1
    Some people have to have the sultry evenings Cocktails in the blue, red and grey But I like every minute of the day.
    INTER-FUCKING-MISSION!!!
    Newcastle-Riverside 02/22/92!!!
    E.rutherford New Jersey 01/06/06
    Athens -Greece.survived !barely-
    Wembley 18/06/07- no words- just smiles!
  • That's awesome! Wow! Man, your gonna have some deep sea diving fun, I suppose. You taking a vacation anywhere that you can use your new found skills? :)


    i just got back from Dubai where i did my course.
    done two sea dives in the Indian Ocean since I passed- honestly the most amazing sights ive seen- for a man who gets panicked in the ocean- its so peaceful down there!
    bliss!
    Some people have to have the sultry evenings Cocktails in the blue, red and grey But I like every minute of the day.
    INTER-FUCKING-MISSION!!!
    Newcastle-Riverside 02/22/92!!!
    E.rutherford New Jersey 01/06/06
    Athens -Greece.survived !barely-
    Wembley 18/06/07- no words- just smiles!
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,390
    Unplanned, their clothes match in academic brown.
    Standing, they stare at the bunched up sheets
    scoping for liner notes. They read the space
    in between them like test directions.

    He sits on the bed and begins to remove his shoes.
    He places them next to textbooks he didn't buy.
    His fingers like feelers outline a circle around him
    little by little renaming this bed temporarily his.

    She walks to the window through the incense,
    past the cigarette ash, and inhales the fading plume of Autumn inspiration.
    It is leaving in backpacks zippered shut,
    and locked in car trunks for just a few hours.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    honestly bibliobella....I don't wanna flatter you, but I didn't like this.....it didn't click with me......:( I can't ever imagine bob singing it......I'm listening to subterranean homesick blues right now......and I didn't get any rhythm from your piece......nothing.....I'm only being honest :).....flat.....nada......nothing.....) bob's best friend was rhythm....but this one doesn't have any......I'm only being honest.....cos I like you......
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,390
    ISN wrote:
    honestly bibliobella....I don't wanna flatter you, but I didn't like this.....it didn't click with me......:( I can't ever imagine bob singing it......I'm listening to subterranean homesick blues right now......and I didn't get any rhythm from your piece......nothing.....I'm only being honest :).....flat.....nada......nothing.....) bob's best friend was rhythm....but this one doesn't have any......I'm only being honest.....cos I like you......
    No problem, sounds good. So, I have to write a song like him, not just be inspired by him? I've never written a song. I could try to write a poem more like his words . . .I just bought my first album of his, and I like it. I used to own books of his words, but not anymore. Ok, so the assignment is to write like him, what he would write . . . ok.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • ISN
    ISN Posts: 1,700
    yep.....that's it......because this is a nice poem....although I switched off after realising.....but for this challenge you have to scream like bob......seeeeeeem like bob....etc...your poem doesn't fit right now, although I respect you as a poet.......this is not Dylanesque.....listen to him a bit more.....he's amazing....a real guru.....a real God of Poetry....and Master of Music......thanks......I jus wanted to be honest cos I'm having an honesty drive tonight.......:)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,390
    ISN wrote:
    yep.....that's it......because this is a nice poem....although I switched off after realising.....but for this challenge you have to scream like bob......seeeeeeem like bob....etc...your poem doesn't fit right now, although I respect you as a poet.......this is not Dylanesque.....listen to him a bit more.....he's amazing....a real guru.....a real God of Poetry....and Master of Music......thanks......I jus wanted to be honest cos I'm having an honesty drive tonight.......:)
    Just call me Bobbybella or Bibliobob or Dylla . . . I'm making myself laugh, silly me.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird