Setaside's Poetry.... if you like...
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This one was written back in April and was the first to finally be squeezed from the muse after about 2 years of writer's block.
RETURN/of the left hand
I’m totally hated, and my Sumerian face is bruised.
She hit me as hard as she could,
The floodwaters rushing the gates,
And in supplication
I bowed out to the better movement.
With trepidation my tiptoed serenity is compromised;
The trembling of the earth the foreboding of yet another sunset unnamed.
The infallibility of the future and the waves of the new tide…
I have watched the moonrise
In awe,
The youngest of children revisited (and never fully understood).
The wonder and fear of it all
Bleached and smattered,
Dried like conch shells on a shelf,
Remnants of what was an evolution left upon the ears of the blind,
The last description a raspy voice lost the in the tempest finally arrived
And a postscript left alone.I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.0 -
Lots of descriptive terms. It reads like a short story, cut and spliced... no skin, only organs and bowels. How does one interpret or derive meaning from that? I still cannot fathom your ability to continuously flow on a single thought or subject. Though it seems many of these are almost interchangable. The "subjects," or victims are so similar... almost manifestations of the writer, something indignant. I should probably stick to cynicism, depth has only one direction.0
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I have always been taught by overzealous symbolists (of which I wholeheartedly subscribe to) that it isn't what's out so much as it is what's in.
What is anything made of if it is hollow? I once read a myth that essentially said that you couldn't know a man or a woman unless they were spread across the road. Interesting theory and, I guess, lol, biologically it's true.
All thoughts are subjects in their own right. I believe this.
As for being idignant, hmmm.... I don't mean to come across in that manner. I have always just hoped that any piece would be strong enough to last or stand on its own. I have no wish to come across as arrogant. And I REALLY apologize if you get that impression.
Depth may start as only one direction, but imagine the drill that plunges miles into the earth's crust and breaks into the unknown grotto... depth spreads quickly. Don't sell yourself short, regardless of the quality of any piece or conversation.
Cynicism, on the other hand, is also quite healthy. I say salt it with some irony and let it grow! LOLI'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.0 -
someone should be writing a book a
the thumbs up is hilarious
i'm canadianconvicted0 -
Originally posted by keven 33
someone should be writing a book a
i don't think that's the first time Seta's heard that before...i agree!!*Rock and/or Roll!*0 -
Originally posted by keven 33
someone should be writing a book a
the thumbs up is hilarious
i'm canadian
wow. i really hope that really was a compliment because i'm taking it that way. thank you.
and lol what does your nationality have anything to do with anything?I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.0 -
Originally posted by actalo
depth has only one direction.i believe i'll be adding this to my list of quotable board babble
(no offense meant, promise!)
superfine actalo
and a q for kevin 33... i recognize that sig... some other username... cracks me up anyway...
and a q for seta... (since you pubically post all my pm's, no sense in going that route anymore... :P) um.... (and no animosity or jocularity... just curiosity) why so in love with a dying thing?
fear of commitment? and ego trip on loving the ugly? a power thing over a crumpled ballerina? too many gwenyth paltrow movies???
this is a most masculine phenomenon, this love of small weak needy things
and... in a woman's need for love... does she sell herself short and create herself weak? or does she live alone, the words "feminist bitch" slung around her neck like an albatross?
vibrator happily buzzing away between the matresses???
where be the median, yo? age?Nosotros nunca escuchamos la voz adentro0 -
Lifeisworth... I didn't mean to break a trust with you, I swear it. Your questions gave me a forum (no pun intended) to discuss my reasons for things.... i took advantage of that and I am sorry if I offended and I prostrate myself in front of you for forgiveness.
No fear of commitment. No ego trip. and certainly no power trip... if anything the poem is fraught with powerlessness both of the dancer AND of the watcher.
I don't see it as a masculine thing. I see it as a spirit reaching out, hesitantly and then realizing that it has NO idea what to do or how to do it or what's expected of it. I strongly resist the idea of machismo, especially where my poetry is concerned. The thought of some jock mantra entering my words causes me no end of pain.
Have you ever witnessed a dying butterfly, trembling on the stem or on the petals of a flower or on the leaf? It is a signal beauty and one that is laden with a pragmatic beauty so potent that if you let it, it will hurt you. Your chest tightens as you look upon one of the wonders in this world so mundane (death, it happens everyday, to everyone) that no one notices it until it swallows them whole. Only then do they choose to question. and again, it hurts. You don't know why.
As for the age median, I always thought that the ballerina was ageless... on the stage, in real life... she is a symbol of have and have not, love and loss. Clothed nakedness, the one state none of us can deal with: utter vulnerability.
IF she is a feminist, then she would be considered a failed feminist. Her albatross was that she loved too much in a world where that is a crime. She was human. That was also her crime. She was judged and found wanting.
And there will never ever be a vibrator reference in my poetry. LOL. Damn you!I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.0 -
Originally posted by setaside2
And there will never ever be a vibrator reference in my poetry. LOL. Damn you!
so, that wasn't a poem you sent me last night?....
HA!!*Rock and/or Roll!*0 -
Marc,
I read these a few days ago so forgive me for not responding sooner...
I've said it before and I'll keep on sayin in, you really have a way with words. Your use of imagery and creation of visualizations is phenomenal. There's nothing I like more than to actually be able to see what I'm reading.
Your first poem ISLE, well all I could hear in my head was Ed's voice reading it aloud. To me this seemed like it was an extended version of "I'm Open," like the draft that didn't make the album cut. Take that as a compliment, cuz I think Eddie inspires us all with his words!
"Retaliation" and "Say So" both seemed very personal, like you had taken scenes out of your own home and put it on paper. I pictured you reciting them in a coffee house with vigor. And we all clapped, or snapped our fingers like true beats, at the end.
Ballerina was almost traumatic to read. I guess that was the point, to feel her defeat. Somehow it's easy, and therefore painful to relate to suffering girls. My poor tortured soul!
So basically, you blow me away. Plus I'm glad that I now understand how you chose your username!
"And set aside to be packed away"wide awake & reaching out....
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My dear twink... thanks for reading it, I am glad it moved you at least a little to the left.
And the name setaside came from a long and useless story that has nothing to do with my poetry. LOL however it has a lot to do with my sarcasm.
Here's one last one for a bit for you all...
KLEENEX & BUCKSHOT/midnight oil
New York City was,
Shall we say,
Stellar
That night.
Frozen
But stellar.
And I,
With my glittering gun,
Home at last...
They’ll never miss
The things they didn’t appreciate anyway.
The gift is non-refundable.
The life is non-returnable,
But by God
It can be taken away.
There are many,
Many,
Types of love affairs.
Some are casual,
Some twenty-four hours,
Some at a glance.
Perhaps a girl with similar eyes
Similar smile…
Charm
Is a deadly gift.
I consider it a disease really.
Charm is for luck:
You hang it on a necklace,
Give it your younger sister and tell her,
“Here. It’ll keep them away.”
Charm is a tool,
Passionate,
And it is used with a sculptor’s grace and
Accuracy
To construct an outward appearance
All too appealing.
And she was surreal
This divinely new figurine...
The clarity of déjà vu is unmistakable.
The reaction sadly unavoidable,
And it hurt to see her bleed;
But my silver partner and I
Had already noticed the full moon.
The werewolves on the prowl,
I the hunter once trapped:
Memories do not die as fast as the triggerhappy.
After all,
Though silver was once liquefied to cure
The common cold,
The acid in my veins runs deeper
And with more resolve.
How ironic that we have constructed
The
Urban
Lifestyle
The garden is the target,
The flowers wilted,
The natural colors faded and bleached...
The heat of the fresh asphalt burnt out
In the cold of concrete
And the city at night...
One doesn’t look for the moon.
Your stars are made of neon glass.
Fluorescent lights point north.
To be homeward bound
Costs $2.50 a mile,
And to fall in love can cost you
Fifty
Dollars
An hour.
For most people it’s a fair deal.
But an affair
Is an affair,
And perhaps I take it personally.
I say, “Have a nice day”
I mean it
By God.
Obsessively I mean it.
I play a role dammit.
I refuse to give up my station,
My pillar,
My sleeping hollow,
To some bitch in a Lexus,
To some guy in a trenchcoat
Opened,
Naked...
Why must I repeat the material?
Love is subjective.
It waxes.
It wanes.
It pulls the tide.
An entity, sister to desire,
With a life and death
Either by Kleenex or buckshot.
In love the pen and the sword
Are equals.
And that kills me.
And for that she dies.
For the fact that I still bleed
She dies.
Tragic, sick and serial
True,
But I sort it out on this plane
Perhaps a cup of coffee in the next.
It could’ve been someone else,
A story I’ll never know...
For love,
Or for whatever ideals of such
I possess,
You can die believing or
Kill getting it across;
I am not the only
Nor the last,
A sensual sight surround
That neither hides nor displays
True motive,
Charm,
A thought that still captivates me,
Still the prey.
I love them all but it seems to no avail.
If this game of interstellar cat and mouse
Continues
I may be forced to admit
That my chrome plated friend here
Has become my best friend and my savior.
Perhaps he shall retire
And in his death he shall save me
From mine own…
The blood is at my feet.
The neon flickers a dull red...
And apology is the only weapon with which
I can aim.
Back me up if I end up firing blanks.I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.0 -
"And apology is the only weapon with which
I can aim."
I LOVE that.
I am enjoying your 'voice'.0 -
Originally posted by savannah66
"And apology is the only weapon with which
I can aim."
I LOVE that.
I am enjoying your 'voice'.
thank you. That line is in my head an awful lot when something happens that I have no control over.
as for mi voz, milady, come closer and I shalt sing to thee softly a new song...
there once was a lad from birmingham
sat on the grass cross legged
bit the wheat straw in the sun so fine
played his guitar as it got late
oh the evening poured in to the sound
the whipporwill voicing his stress
the moon observed as the feet hit the ground
our bird taking flight under duress
round and round the chase went on
through thorns and misty thrush
the thistles did grasp and cut
the face on the lam, full flush
for flight is not of fancy
and the fervency not contrived
But the boy had better grow wings
If his hope is to remain alive
oh the moon sets slowly
and the stars doth turn
as he hides out in the night
as the pursuit persuaded thunders by
he hides silently in fright
for to be a free man is tragic
and to be caged is called humane
if the stars fallen are magic
Then the sun risen is mundane
Thank god for the washing rain
Thank cloud for the washing rain
His footprints now hidden he rides
Atop the winded train
A trail of clothing the only remind
Of the path whence he came
Oh Today's gone cotton
And tomorrow's gone steel
The future the prize to steal
And it appears that to be forgotten
Is merely a blind turn of the wheel
Yes a fortunate turn of the wheel.
Savannah66 inspired... spontaneous poetry. I thank you madam. I haven't done one on the spot like that in a long time.I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.0 -
setaside, thank you.
Truly.
So much depends on chance, eh?
And to be a free man IS tragic, I agree.
Freedom brings the ability to choose, and choice causes misery.
Thank you, again.0 -
Sorry I haven't responded before now. I read some of them a few days ago!
I think you're writing is well thought out,and It's great you can express yourself that way. Nice work:D
Keep them coming.“Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.” -Stella Adler0 -
Thank you much miss firefairy...
Though it appears from your HOLY SHIT post count that you are far more prolific than I...
Let me know when you reach a thousand?I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.0 -
Originally posted by savannah66
... to be a free man IS tragic, I agree.
Freedom brings the ability to choose
...choice causes misery.
bad choices cause misery if made for the wrong reason...
bad choices made for the right reasons are just mistakes...
or to quote mr. FLEA - "better to regret something you did, than something you didn't do"
i could go on and on about freedom... and so could anyone who knows what it's like to live in someone else's cage... the real dumbass is someone who lives in their own cage and blames the world for its existence
it's like... duh! um.... it's not even locked... hello....
duh....
we were haging with this chick too high on A one night
put her in the car
told her it was locked
she stayed in there till we opened the door
duh!Nosotros nunca escuchamos la voz adentro0 -
Originally posted by setaside2
Thank you much miss firefairy...
Though it appears from your HOLY SHIT post count that you are far more prolific than I...
Let me know when you reach a thousand?
Oh sorry I got a little carried away!:D“Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.” -Stella Adler0 -
Well obviously I do too, otherwise this rather pretentious thread wouldn't be here... sigh.
But I love when people read my poetry, for good or for ill, and they give their opinions on it and tell me what a freak I am...
or not.
LOL maybe ONE day I'll be at 1000, but certainly NOT today. You know, Leathermosquitoman must view you as a threat of some sort...
As it were, check back in here every so often and I'll be around with new stuff somewheres....
setaI'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.0 -
Since high school I have struggled to learn how to play guitar... and I'm still not very good at it at all. This piece started as a song written after my girlfriend of over a year and I broke up. Those things are never pretty... But one day I'll remember how I wrote the song and I'll sing it again.
LOL and it's a short one for all of you tired of mucking your way through my marshes.
EARTH’S SHADOW/debate
Your voice could shatter glass
You’d rage about the room
You’d say
“I’m tired of this black eye
I’m tired of all the shame,”
You’d say:
That you might bend the rules
You might tie the noose
But it would be love.
If it’s clean
If it’s dirty
It’s me
With all this black and white around
The logic and restraint
Fade away…
Your voice could shatter glass
The eclipse fell from the night
You’d say:
“This collar’s a little loose
Too much freedom hurts,”
You’d say
That I can’t let you go
You had dreamed I’d stay
And it would be love.
If it’s clean
If it’s dirty
It’s me
With all this black and white around
The scissors have gone dull
The rope begins to fray…
Your screams they shattered glass
My heart fell to the floor
You said:
“that eclipse last night was mine
I stole it from the sun,”
You said
That the light had made you blind
The fire burned you up
And it had been love.
With all this black and white around
My logic and restraint
Fade away…
My voice:
It shattered glass.I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.0
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