Setaside's Poetry.... if you like...

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  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    This one was written back in April and was the first to finally be squeezed from the muse after about 2 years of writer's block.


    RETURN/of the left hand


    I’m totally hated, and my Sumerian face is bruised.
    She hit me as hard as she could,
    The floodwaters rushing the gates,
    And in supplication
    I bowed out to the better movement.

    With trepidation my tiptoed serenity is compromised;
    The trembling of the earth the foreboding of yet another sunset unnamed.

    The infallibility of the future and the waves of the new tide…
    I have watched the moonrise
    In awe,
    The youngest of children revisited (and never fully understood).
    The wonder and fear of it all
    Bleached and smattered,
    Dried like conch shells on a shelf,
    Remnants of what was an evolution left upon the ears of the blind,
    The last description a raspy voice lost the in the tempest finally arrived
    And a postscript left alone.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • Lots of descriptive terms. It reads like a short story, cut and spliced... no skin, only organs and bowels. How does one interpret or derive meaning from that? I still cannot fathom your ability to continuously flow on a single thought or subject. Though it seems many of these are almost interchangable. The "subjects," or victims are so similar... almost manifestations of the writer, something indignant. I should probably stick to cynicism, depth has only one direction.
  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    I have always been taught by overzealous symbolists (of which I wholeheartedly subscribe to) that it isn't what's out so much as it is what's in.

    What is anything made of if it is hollow? I once read a myth that essentially said that you couldn't know a man or a woman unless they were spread across the road. Interesting theory and, I guess, lol, biologically it's true.

    All thoughts are subjects in their own right. I believe this.

    As for being idignant, hmmm.... I don't mean to come across in that manner. I have always just hoped that any piece would be strong enough to last or stand on its own. I have no wish to come across as arrogant. And I REALLY apologize if you get that impression.

    Depth may start as only one direction, but imagine the drill that plunges miles into the earth's crust and breaks into the unknown grotto... depth spreads quickly. Don't sell yourself short, regardless of the quality of any piece or conversation.

    Cynicism, on the other hand, is also quite healthy. I say salt it with some irony and let it grow! LOL
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • someone should be writing a book a
    the thumbs up is hilarious

    i'm canadian
    convicted
  • Sharon_Hearts_PJ
    Sharon_Hearts_PJ Bristol, PA Posts: 1,383
    Originally posted by keven 33
    someone should be writing a book a

    i don't think that's the first time Seta's heard that before...i agree!!
    *Rock and/or Roll!*
  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    Originally posted by keven 33
    someone should be writing a book a
    the thumbs up is hilarious

    i'm canadian

    wow. i really hope that really was a compliment because i'm taking it that way. thank you.

    and lol what does your nationality have anything to do with anything? :)
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • Originally posted by actalo
    depth has only one direction.



    :) i believe i'll be adding this to my list of quotable board babble :) (no offense meant, promise!)


    superfine actalo



    and a q for kevin 33... i recognize that sig... some other username... cracks me up anyway...


    and a q for seta... (since you pubically post all my pm's, no sense in going that route anymore... :P) um.... (and no animosity or jocularity... just curiosity) why so in love with a dying thing?
    fear of commitment? and ego trip on loving the ugly? a power thing over a crumpled ballerina? too many gwenyth paltrow movies???

    this is a most masculine phenomenon, this love of small weak needy things

    and... in a woman's need for love... does she sell herself short and create herself weak? or does she live alone, the words "feminist bitch" slung around her neck like an albatross?
    vibrator happily buzzing away between the matresses???

    where be the median, yo? age?
    Nosotros nunca escuchamos la voz adentro
  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    Lifeisworth... I didn't mean to break a trust with you, I swear it. Your questions gave me a forum (no pun intended) to discuss my reasons for things.... i took advantage of that and I am sorry if I offended and I prostrate myself in front of you for forgiveness.

    No fear of commitment. No ego trip. and certainly no power trip... if anything the poem is fraught with powerlessness both of the dancer AND of the watcher.

    I don't see it as a masculine thing. I see it as a spirit reaching out, hesitantly and then realizing that it has NO idea what to do or how to do it or what's expected of it. I strongly resist the idea of machismo, especially where my poetry is concerned. The thought of some jock mantra entering my words causes me no end of pain.

    Have you ever witnessed a dying butterfly, trembling on the stem or on the petals of a flower or on the leaf? It is a signal beauty and one that is laden with a pragmatic beauty so potent that if you let it, it will hurt you. Your chest tightens as you look upon one of the wonders in this world so mundane (death, it happens everyday, to everyone) that no one notices it until it swallows them whole. Only then do they choose to question. and again, it hurts. You don't know why.

    As for the age median, I always thought that the ballerina was ageless... on the stage, in real life... she is a symbol of have and have not, love and loss. Clothed nakedness, the one state none of us can deal with: utter vulnerability.
    IF she is a feminist, then she would be considered a failed feminist. Her albatross was that she loved too much in a world where that is a crime. She was human. That was also her crime. She was judged and found wanting.

    And there will never ever be a vibrator reference in my poetry. LOL. Damn you! :D
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • Sharon_Hearts_PJ
    Sharon_Hearts_PJ Bristol, PA Posts: 1,383
    Originally posted by setaside2


    And there will never ever be a vibrator reference in my poetry. LOL. Damn you! :D

    so, that wasn't a poem you sent me last night?....
    HA!!
    *Rock and/or Roll!*
  • ShoeTheShoeless
    ShoeTheShoeless Long Island, NY Posts: 40
    Marc,
    I read these a few days ago so forgive me for not responding sooner...
    I've said it before and I'll keep on sayin in, you really have a way with words. Your use of imagery and creation of visualizations is phenomenal. There's nothing I like more than to actually be able to see what I'm reading.
    Your first poem ISLE, well all I could hear in my head was Ed's voice reading it aloud. To me this seemed like it was an extended version of "I'm Open," like the draft that didn't make the album cut. Take that as a compliment, cuz I think Eddie inspires us all with his words!
    "Retaliation" and "Say So" both seemed very personal, like you had taken scenes out of your own home and put it on paper. I pictured you reciting them in a coffee house with vigor. And we all clapped, or snapped our fingers like true beats, at the end.
    Ballerina was almost traumatic to read. I guess that was the point, to feel her defeat. Somehow it's easy, and therefore painful to relate to suffering girls. My poor tortured soul!
    So basically, you blow me away. Plus I'm glad that I now understand how you chose your username!
    "And set aside to be packed away" :)
    wide awake & reaching out....

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  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    My dear twink... thanks for reading it, I am glad it moved you at least a little to the left.

    And the name setaside came from a long and useless story that has nothing to do with my poetry. LOL however it has a lot to do with my sarcasm.

    Here's one last one for a bit for you all...

    KLEENEX & BUCKSHOT/midnight oil

    New York City was,
    Shall we say,
    Stellar
    That night.
    Frozen
    But stellar.
    And I,
    With my glittering gun,
    Home at last...
    They’ll never miss
    The things they didn’t appreciate anyway.
    The gift is non-refundable.
    The life is non-returnable,
    But by God
    It can be taken away.
    There are many,
    Many,
    Types of love affairs.
    Some are casual,
    Some twenty-four hours,
    Some at a glance.
    Perhaps a girl with similar eyes
    Similar smile…
    Charm
    Is a deadly gift.
    I consider it a disease really.
    Charm is for luck:
    You hang it on a necklace,
    Give it your younger sister and tell her,
    “Here. It’ll keep them away.”
    Charm is a tool,
    Passionate,
    And it is used with a sculptor’s grace and
    Accuracy
    To construct an outward appearance
    All too appealing.
    And she was surreal
    This divinely new figurine...
    The clarity of déjà vu is unmistakable.
    The reaction sadly unavoidable,
    And it hurt to see her bleed;
    But my silver partner and I
    Had already noticed the full moon.
    The werewolves on the prowl,
    I the hunter once trapped:
    Memories do not die as fast as the triggerhappy.
    After all,
    Though silver was once liquefied to cure
    The common cold,
    The acid in my veins runs deeper
    And with more resolve.
    How ironic that we have constructed
    The
    Urban
    Lifestyle
    The garden is the target,
    The flowers wilted,
    The natural colors faded and bleached...
    The heat of the fresh asphalt burnt out
    In the cold of concrete
    And the city at night...
    One doesn’t look for the moon.
    Your stars are made of neon glass.
    Fluorescent lights point north.
    To be homeward bound
    Costs $2.50 a mile,
    And to fall in love can cost you
    Fifty
    Dollars
    An hour.
    For most people it’s a fair deal.
    But an affair
    Is an affair,
    And perhaps I take it personally.
    I say, “Have a nice day”
    I mean it
    By God.
    Obsessively I mean it.
    I play a role dammit.
    I refuse to give up my station,
    My pillar,
    My sleeping hollow,
    To some bitch in a Lexus,
    To some guy in a trenchcoat
    Opened,
    Naked...
    Why must I repeat the material?
    Love is subjective.
    It waxes.
    It wanes.
    It pulls the tide.
    An entity, sister to desire,
    With a life and death
    Either by Kleenex or buckshot.
    In love the pen and the sword
    Are equals.
    And that kills me.
    And for that she dies.
    For the fact that I still bleed
    She dies.
    Tragic, sick and serial
    True,
    But I sort it out on this plane
    Perhaps a cup of coffee in the next.
    It could’ve been someone else,
    A story I’ll never know...
    For love,
    Or for whatever ideals of such
    I possess,
    You can die believing or
    Kill getting it across;
    I am not the only
    Nor the last,
    A sensual sight surround
    That neither hides nor displays
    True motive,
    Charm,
    A thought that still captivates me,
    Still the prey.
    I love them all but it seems to no avail.
    If this game of interstellar cat and mouse
    Continues
    I may be forced to admit
    That my chrome plated friend here
    Has become my best friend and my savior.
    Perhaps he shall retire
    And in his death he shall save me
    From mine own…
    The blood is at my feet.
    The neon flickers a dull red...
    And apology is the only weapon with which
    I can aim.
    Back me up if I end up firing blanks.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • "And apology is the only weapon with which
    I can aim."

    I LOVE that.

    I am enjoying your 'voice'.
  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    Originally posted by savannah66
    "And apology is the only weapon with which
    I can aim."

    I LOVE that.

    I am enjoying your 'voice'.

    thank you. That line is in my head an awful lot when something happens that I have no control over.

    as for mi voz, milady, come closer and I shalt sing to thee softly a new song...

    there once was a lad from birmingham
    sat on the grass cross legged
    bit the wheat straw in the sun so fine
    played his guitar as it got late

    oh the evening poured in to the sound
    the whipporwill voicing his stress
    the moon observed as the feet hit the ground
    our bird taking flight under duress

    round and round the chase went on
    through thorns and misty thrush
    the thistles did grasp and cut
    the face on the lam, full flush

    for flight is not of fancy
    and the fervency not contrived
    But the boy had better grow wings
    If his hope is to remain alive

    oh the moon sets slowly
    and the stars doth turn
    as he hides out in the night
    as the pursuit persuaded thunders by
    he hides silently in fright

    for to be a free man is tragic
    and to be caged is called humane
    if the stars fallen are magic
    Then the sun risen is mundane
    Thank god for the washing rain
    Thank cloud for the washing rain

    His footprints now hidden he rides
    Atop the winded train
    A trail of clothing the only remind
    Of the path whence he came

    Oh Today's gone cotton
    And tomorrow's gone steel
    The future the prize to steal
    And it appears that to be forgotten
    Is merely a blind turn of the wheel
    Yes a fortunate turn of the wheel.

    Savannah66 inspired... spontaneous poetry. I thank you madam. I haven't done one on the spot like that in a long time.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • setaside, thank you.
    Truly.


    So much depends on chance, eh?
    And to be a free man IS tragic, I agree.
    Freedom brings the ability to choose, and choice causes misery.

    Thank you, again.
  • Sorry I haven't responded before now. I read some of them a few days ago!
    I think you're writing is well thought out,and It's great you can express yourself that way. Nice work:D
    Keep them coming.
    “Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.” -Stella Adler
  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    Thank you much miss firefairy...

    Though it appears from your HOLY SHIT post count that you are far more prolific than I... :D

    Let me know when you reach a thousand?
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • Originally posted by savannah66
    ... to be a free man IS tragic, I agree.
    Freedom brings the ability to choose
    ...choice causes misery.



    bad choices cause misery if made for the wrong reason...
    bad choices made for the right reasons are just mistakes...




    or to quote mr. FLEA - "better to regret something you did, than something you didn't do"



    :)


    i could go on and on about freedom... and so could anyone who knows what it's like to live in someone else's cage... the real dumbass is someone who lives in their own cage and blames the world for its existence


    it's like... duh! um.... it's not even locked... hello....


    duh....


    we were haging with this chick too high on A one night
    put her in the car
    told her it was locked
    she stayed in there till we opened the door


    duh!
    Nosotros nunca escuchamos la voz adentro
  • Originally posted by setaside2
    Thank you much miss firefairy...

    Though it appears from your HOLY SHIT post count that you are far more prolific than I... :D

    Let me know when you reach a thousand?
    LOL no I just like to babble on and on and on and.......
    Oh sorry I got a little carried away!:D
    “Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.” -Stella Adler
  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    Well obviously I do too, otherwise this rather pretentious thread wouldn't be here... sigh.

    But I love when people read my poetry, for good or for ill, and they give their opinions on it and tell me what a freak I am...

    or not.

    LOL maybe ONE day I'll be at 1000, but certainly NOT today. You know, Leathermosquitoman must view you as a threat of some sort... :)

    As it were, check back in here every so often and I'll be around with new stuff somewheres....

    seta :D
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
  • setaside2
    setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    Since high school I have struggled to learn how to play guitar... and I'm still not very good at it at all. This piece started as a song written after my girlfriend of over a year and I broke up. Those things are never pretty... But one day I'll remember how I wrote the song and I'll sing it again.

    LOL and it's a short one for all of you tired of mucking your way through my marshes.

    EARTH’S SHADOW/debate

    Your voice could shatter glass
    You’d rage about the room
    You’d say
    “I’m tired of this black eye
    I’m tired of all the shame,”
    You’d say:
    That you might bend the rules
    You might tie the noose
    But it would be love.
    If it’s clean
    If it’s dirty
    It’s me
    With all this black and white around
    The logic and restraint
    Fade away…
    Your voice could shatter glass
    The eclipse fell from the night
    You’d say:
    “This collar’s a little loose
    Too much freedom hurts,”
    You’d say
    That I can’t let you go
    You had dreamed I’d stay
    And it would be love.
    If it’s clean
    If it’s dirty
    It’s me
    With all this black and white around
    The scissors have gone dull
    The rope begins to fray…
    Your screams they shattered glass
    My heart fell to the floor
    You said:
    “that eclipse last night was mine
    I stole it from the sun,”
    You said
    That the light had made you blind
    The fire burned you up
    And it had been love.
    With all this black and white around
    My logic and restraint
    Fade away…
    My voice:
    It shattered glass.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.