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mccreadyisgodmccreadyisgod Posts: 6,395
edited February 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I opened up.

Like a surgeon, I exposed things
That I never meant for you to see.

And there you sat, alone, cold...

I was there, but you did not see me
I had arms, but they could not hold you.

And we pretend...

For ourselves? For each other?
For some sense of decorum?

Now I see the outlines of my reality.

I offered you everything I am,
And you wanted nothing.
...and if you don't like it, you can suck on an egg.
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  • Spot In The SkySpot In The Sky Posts: 1,175
    i like it lots
    K
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  • tsopotelbatsopotelba Posts: 80
    I've been there too, mccreadyisgod. It's not fun.
  • mccreadyisgodmccreadyisgod Posts: 6,395
    tsopotelba wrote:
    I've been there too, mccreadyisgod. It's not fun.


    Eh...

    At least, now I know...

    Ultimately, as much as I want her, if she doesn't want me back, it's not good for me anyways.

    The tough part is, IF she wanted me as much as I want her... *bliss*
    ...and if you don't like it, you can suck on an egg.
  • FelicityFelicity Posts: 339
    ten*yep*ten
  • tsopotelbatsopotelba Posts: 80
    mccreadyisgod wrote:
    Eh...

    Ultimately, as much as I want her, if she doesn't want me back, it's not good for me anyways.


    The stupid part of course is that your head might think it knows what's good for you but your "heart" is going to keep on feeling what it's feeling.

    I sometimes wish I could write poetry. I felt like responding to this poem with another poem, but I can't, so I have to settle for lame comments.
  • KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
    tsopotelba wrote:
    The stupid part of course is that your head might think it knows what's good for you but your "heart" is going to keep on feeling what it's feeling.

    I sometimes wish I could write poetry. I felt like responding to this poem with another poem, but I can't, so I have to settle for lame comments.

    Near, far, wherever you are
    I believe that the heart does go on
    Once more you open the door
    And you're here in my heart
    And my heart will go on and on

    yes, I'm making fun of you. But in good fun.
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • tsopotelbatsopotelba Posts: 80
    Kwyjibo wrote:
    Near, far, wherever you are
    I believe that the heart does go on
    Once more you open the door
    And you're here in my heart
    And my heart will go on and on

    yes, I'm making fun of you. But in good fun.


    Right, okay, I can quote crappy songs too!:

    Just the thought of being close to you
    It's incomparable
    Should be happy with the life I live
    And the things I do
    Seems like I have it all

    Can't make you, make you love me baby
    It's my life, what can I do?
    Can't make you love me, alright
    I'm just a girl with a crush on you
    I'm just a girl with a crush on you

    -- Britney Spears('s poor lame anonymous writers)
  • FelicityFelicity Posts: 339
    i mean if camilla is finally getting charlie,there is hope for everybody.

    go git whatchya want!

    :)~
  • tsopotelbatsopotelba Posts: 80
    There's also this, and it's a beautiful song, and I can't write crap like this:

    Cause I can't make you love me
    if you don't
    You can't make your heart feel
    something it won't
    Here in the dark
    in these final hours
    I will lay down my heart
    And I'll feel the power
    but you won't
    No, you won't
    Cause I can't make you love me
    if you don't
  • mccreadyisgodmccreadyisgod Posts: 6,395
    tsopotelba wrote:
    There's also this, and it's a beautiful song, and I can't write crap like this:

    Cause I can't make you love me
    if you don't...


    I had to look that up...

    Bonnie Raitt...?

    That's where I am, alright.

    As much as I'd like to turn and walk away... I am still sorta waiting...

    STUPID, STUPID ME.
    ...and if you don't like it, you can suck on an egg.
  • KwyjiboKwyjibo Posts: 662
    tsopotelba wrote:
    Right, okay, I can quote crappy songs too!:

    Just the thought of being close to you
    It's incomparable
    Should be happy with the life I live
    And the things I do
    Seems like I have it all

    Can't make you, make you love me baby
    It's my life, what can I do?
    Can't make you love me, alright
    I'm just a girl with a crush on you
    I'm just a girl with a crush on you

    -- Britney Spears('s poor lame anonymous writers)
    :D:D:D


    hahahaha

    drunk

    keep on rocking the bonnie raitt.. I uh.. guess.

    there's also a song called "Stupid me"
    its either by the pixies or just frank black and the catholics I don't recall
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
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