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I think I'll pass.

chadwickchadwick up my assPosts: 21,152
I think I’ll pass.

When off this earth I do rise
I will ignite into all aflame
she will be there
in spark.

It has always been her
her hair
always her hair
but so was her neck

On down
I could not ever stop
my hands would go running wild across her in a motion
of slowness
to touching.

Within her
I would swear to god
as thighs crossed rivers bridging
for our lives.

Angels
as many as heaven could hold
would sing for her.

And I’m supposed to live?
I think I’ll pass.
for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

"Hear me, my chiefs!
I am tired; my heart is
sick and sad. From where
the sun stands I will fight
no more forever."

Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
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  • skyeriverwinterskyeriverwinter Posts: 1,875
    My dear Mr. Chadwick...this is utterly beautiful...I was almost left speechless...the pictures painted by your words are whispers in the clouds that you brought to the page...I love your writing...it keeps me dreaming...
  • chadwickchadwick up my assPosts: 21,152
    skyeriverwinter,

    thank you for your kind response.
    i am pleased my writing grabs you, that is my job.
    i love my job.

    i want to share with you something i find funny about this piece.

    i wrote this poem about 2-3 months ago in my car down at the beach, wrote it on an envelope, probably a bill or something. i finally brought the envelope/writing into the house yesterday. it had been under the sun visor collecting dust. so there you have it. a little editing, add or minus a few words and whamo. you have yourself a poem.
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • mikalinamikalina Posts: 7,206
    Hi Chad - I too find this to be such a beautiful poem. What a lovely way to start my day. I am speechless.

    Thank you for sharing your beach scene and your little envelope - I love the stories behind the poems. :D

    Have a wonderful day :thumbup:
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  • Godfather.Godfather. Posts: 12,504
    wow un-real....no, very real ! this is outstanding, I'm paying attention and trying to learn from you guys.

    Godfather.
    it dosen't matter to me what a man dose for a living you understand..
    as long as his interest's don't conflict with mine.
  • pandorapandora Posts: 21,855
    I agree, for me, the stories behind the writing is as interesting as the writings themselves and brings insight to the author. I like to know where the spark comes from and what to thank.
    As always Chadwick, you express your thoughts beautifully.

    "Judge yourself if you feel the need
    Just let me known to be
    In search of the truth myself
    There is a drop of blood on the ground
    And it seems to me that it's not my kind
    And I can't be sure if its yours or mine."
  • rollingsrollings unknownPosts: 6,719
    Happy Anniversary
    A horse once heard Stone Gossard playing guitar on the other side of a wall. And that, my friends, is where giraffes came from.
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